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In a world where living body armour marks privilege, Kal chooses death over sexual servitude but is tasked by the rulers to help those like her. When she realises they're experimenting on her friends, she must team up with the man who betrayed her to save herself and everyone she loves. #preDV #A #F

Super interesting premise! That second sentence is clear and specific in terms of stakes! I wonder if you might squeeze in a little more detail in the first sentence? Is there a way to do a bit more world building in this first sentence?

I wondered if you might add more detail about the privilege system in this world -- this is interesting: "In a world where living body armour marks privilege" -- I wondered if you might clarify what "class" Kai is in? And why is she tasked by the rulers to help those like her? Hope that helps!

I agree with this! A bit more clarity in the first sentence could make the pitch even stronger. 🫶